No More Lies update and some general thoughts on editing and revising
(And, man, am I good at short and pithy titles, or what?)
At the end of last July when I finished No More Lies I honestly expected it to be ready to release by now. Some of the delay is, I freely admit, that I hate editing and revising and therefore always put it off as long as I can in hopes that one day a story will spontaneously revise itself. Or that I’ll discover that my junior high and elementary teachers were right and my stuff is perfect in the rough draft. By the way, if any of you teachers should ever happen to see this post, I’d like to have a talk with you about comma splices.
But most of the reason is that this story wasn’t supposed to be a novel. The first two chapters were written when it was supposed to be a short story — a 3000ish word one at that. They got a bit added to them when I changed it to a novella, but they still needed a lot of fleshing out to match the pace and feel of the rest of the book. So then I had to go back over them to see if my additions broke anything else.
Then the third and fourth chapter were written when I thought it was going to be a novella. So I’ve had to add bits to them too. Not as much, but enough that they were more tricky to edit than expected.
Then there was the timeline glitch my spouse pointed out the other day that I discovered was just the tip of the iceberg when it came to timeline problems in the early chapters when I went to fix it. An hour of editing time today was spent trying to fix the timeline without needing to rewrite the whole goddamned book, as several of the later events have to take place on certain dates or other works in the universe break. Okay, so I doubt anyone else would notice if the date of someone’s birth was different between two works when the actual date isn’t given in either, but I’d know, and it would bother me. I’m really, really bothered by timeline issues. (Yes, GRRM‘s thing about how no one should try to work out an exact timeline for ASoIaF does drive me nuts, why do you ask? And don’t get me started on the impossibility of the dates in Little Women …)
Add to this that I’ve recently been reading authors whose books come out on a much slower schedule than current author wisdom says is good for your career and noticing that they, in general, tend to be better than those of authors who release a book or more a year. I’m not saying that there aren’t authors who don’t do wonderful work on a multibook per year schedule, I’m just saying that while it might be best from a “growing your brand” standpoint, it’s not always what’s best for the book. And, as my wife has pointed out to me repeatedly, “Tolkien only wrote a few books.”
And then there’s the fact that I’ve already heavily revised and rereleased “Once A Hero, Always A Hero” and am planning to eventually do the same to Jake’s Last Mission. And Crown of Eldrete really needed at least another punctuation pass before it was published, so it’ll be getting that someday. In other words, I rushed them and it shows. (I rushed them because of some very bad advice that said for an indie author quantity was more important than quality.) I don’t want to be George Lucas, forever tinkering with things I’ve already released to make them what they should’ve been from the start*, but right now that’s what I’m doing.
So, from here on my policy on No More Lies is: I’ll release it when it’s ready. That might be later this year. It might be next year. It probably won’t be later than that.
But it might. And that’s okay too.
Also, I posted a question about covers and blurbs a few days ago and would really like some feedback on that, if people could be so kind.
*Let’s not get into “Han shot first” or anything like that here. Please. Can we all just acknowledge that what Lucas wanted them to be and what fans wanted them to be were not the same thing?
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Chapter Six is up!
The next chapter of Intertwined Lives is available right here.
Cover and blurb opinions sought
Opinions on which of these covers is best? Please no comments on how un-sci-fi it is. I’ve tried making it more so and it just ended up screaming “I was made by an amateur!” Besides, as far as I can tell the important thing for a sf romance cover to have is a male with nice muscles. Got that!
And I’m aware my name is crooked on the bottom one. I forgot to fix it on that one before quitting Photoshop.
And I suppose I could do one with both subseries’ names and no shuriken. So that’s an option too.
And now for the blurb:
I like the long one and will, at the very least, be using it for the back cover copy, but I’m wondering if maybe the shorter one wouldn’t be better for actually selling the book purposes? Suggestions about the blurbs are very much appreciated.
The short one:
All Bobby Kavaliro wanted was a vacation fling to help take his mind off life as a spy posing as an assassin. Instead he fell in love with Karen Thase, a woman from the homeworld he’d run away from years before as a naive teenager, lured by the Anerix High Chancellor’s promises of money and power. Now Bobby’s back on Sweytz, dealing with family and friends he hasn’t seen in a decade and a girlfriend who he’s not sure will still want to be with him when she finds out how badly he lied to her.
And some people in the Anerix government have decided he needs to die.
Bobby’s life has suddenly gotten far, far more interesting than he ever wanted!
The long one:
Years ago, Bobby Kavaliro ran away from Sweytz, from everything and everyone he’d ever known, lured by promises of money and power made by the smooth-talking dictator of Anerix.
A few years later Bobby came to realize how stupid he’d been and became a spy for the very world he left.
A spy posing as an assassin.
A spy whose best friend and mentor has just had his cover blown.
A spy who jilted someone who would now like to see him dead.
A spy, in other words, who needs a vacation. And a spy who is hoping to meet someone to share his bed while on that vacation.
Bobby finds more than that when he meets Karen. So much more, in fact, that before too long he’s moving back to Sweytz, looking for a job, and trying to quickly learn how to be a responsible adult for the first time in his life.
Meanwhile, Anerix’s High Command, now very much suspecting he was a spy, are sending assassins after him . . . and after Karen.
And, as if that wasn’t enough, Karen doesn’t believe half of what he’s told her about his past, nor is she sure she wants to be with him after she gets to know just how temperamental and immature he can be.
Bobby has to grow up fast to keep her love, deal with everything he’s missed while he was gone, try to avoid being killed, try to keep Karen safe, and try to rebuild his relationship with his family, all at the same time.
Five star reviews — Breakup by Dana Stabenow
This is a book I read because I’d read it ages ago and loved it. I like the whole Kate Shugak series, what I’ve read of it anyway — I’m about ten books behind I think — but this is my favorite.
The description, via Goodreads:
In Breakup, Kate Shugak’s loyalties – to the land, her heritage, her home – are put to the test when a series of mishaps lead to murder. April in Alaska is typically a period of rebirth and renewal, and after the long winter Kate has nothing more strenuous on her agenda than paying her taxes. But mayhem abounds as the meltoff flows; this year’s thaw is accompanied by rampaging bears, family feuds, and a plane crash quite literally in Kate’s own backyard. What begins as a series of headaches escalates into possible murder when a dead body is found near her homestead. Initially unwilling to involve herself in the investigation, preferring instead to write off each odd occurrence as a breakup-related peculiarity, Kate is drawn irresistibly to seek the truth. Compelled by her friends to act as problem solver and guided by the spirit of her Aleut grandmother, she finds herself slowly taking on the role of clan leader, a post she is bound to by honor and blood. As breakup becomes increasingly fraught with danger and destruction, Kate must decide whether she can cross the line from passive observer to instrument of change, assuming the role of elder as the mantle of responsibility is passed.
My review:
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I still haven’t read the next book, despite finishing this one in early July. I should remedy that soon. As this book is well into a series, it’s might not be a good place to start, but courtesy of the infodumps I griped about, you can probably start here and not be missing much.
Sorry this is two days late. I somehow managed to forget that I’d changed from updating on Wednesdays to updating on Saturdays. I was checking the sites stats and happened to notice the date I’d posted last week’s posts on and remembered.
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Progress Report
Instead of listing all my works-in-progress and getting depressed by how many I haven’t worked on in ages, this year I am instead updating how far I’ve come on the to do list I posted at the beginning of the year . . . with new items being added because I’m great at making plans, but suck at sticking to them. Asterisks mark things added before this update, but after the initial list.
February went great on the editing front, but not so great on the writing front. I edited 16,916 words of fiction and another 4,224 words of blog and Universal Nexus encyclopedia entries, for a total of 21,140 words edited. Since my goal is 10 to 15,000, that’s awesome. On the other hand, I only wrote 4,561 words. My goal for that is also 10 to 15,000, so that’s much less awesome.
- Edit my wife’s story she wants to submit to Queers Destroy Science Fiction, if she decides she wants to expand it. DONE
- Submit it for her. DONE, REJECTED
- Finish editing my own story for Queers Destroy Science Fiction. DONE
- Submit it. DONE, REJECTED
- *Edit Jake thingy inspired by annoying bit in book I was reading. DONE
- *Submit it to Queers Destroy Science Fiction too, since it’s flash fiction instead of a short story. DONE, REJECTED
- CHANGED ITEM: Alternate between writing Magi, Intertwined Lives, and editing No More Lies, not becoming slavishly devoted to any one work, but keeping in mind and tracking my monthly word count goals. UPDATE: I’ve written 1785 words of Intertwined Lives since posting the last progress report. Unfortunately, most of this was rewriting a badly written chapter. I’ve decided to prioritize my fantasy novel-in-progress, Magi, over Blaughk on Earth as I think it’d be good for my brain to take a break from Universal Nexus occasionally.
- *Maintain schedule of editing and posting a chapter of Intertwined Lives every Tuesday. AM CONSIDERING SWITCHING TO EVERY OTHER TUESDAY INSTEAD AS MORE CHAPTERS THAN EXPECTED ARE REQUIRING DRASTIC REVISION.
- *Once have enough word count/regular installments to do so, submit Intertwined Lives to webfictionguide.com. DONE, AWAITING RESPONSE
- NEW ITEM: Submit Intertwined Lives to Muse’s Success. DONE
- *Remember to use the #TuesdaySerial hashtag on twitter when announcing each week’s chapter. DID IT THE ONE TIME THE CHAPTER CAME OUT ON TIME SINCE LAST PROGRESS REPORT
- NEW ITEM: Submit Jake thingy to Clarkesworld. DONE, REJECTED
- NEW ITEM: Submit wife’s story to Strange Horizons. DONE, AWAITING RESPONSE
- NEW ITEM: Submit own story to Strange Horizons. DONE, AWAITING RESPONSE
- NEW ITEM: Submit “The Traitor” (formerly known as “Jake thingy”) to Daily Science Fiction DONE, AWAITING RESPONSE
- NEW ITEM: If Strange Horizons rejects my story, submit it to Asimov’s.
- Publish No More Lies.
- Devote a month to marketing it. Just a month. No more. After that, it’ll sink or swim on its own.
- CHANGED ITEM: Alternate between writing Magi, Intertwined Lives, and editing the leytgeleshi short story collection, with the same caveats as above. SEE ABOVE FOR WHY/HOW CHANGED
- Write remaining leytgeleshi stories.
- CHANGED ITEM: Alternate between writhing Magi, Intertwined Lives, and editing the Dagger short story collection, with the same caveats as above. SEE ABOVE FOR WHY/HOW CHANGED
- Write remaining Dagger stories.
- Edit remaining leytgeleshi stories.
- Publish leytgeleshi story collection.
- Devote a week to marketing it. It’s going to be a free short story collection (or 99 cents, I can’t recall what we agreed on now.) There’s no sense in devoting a lot of time to marketing it.
- Edit remaining Dagger stories.
- Publish Dagger story collection.
- Devote a week to marketing it. See above for why only a week.
- CHANGED ITEM: Alternate writing Magi and Intertwined Lives. SEE ABOVE FOR WHY/HOW CHANGED
- *Write rpg book. HAVE CONTINUED WORKING ON MECHANICS.
Word count for March so far:
Written: 1338/10000
Edited: 1094/10000
I’m kind of wondering if my sudden desire to write fantasy has anything to do with the amount of Torchlight and Torchlight II I’ve been playing lately . . .
Five star reviews — Triplanetary by E. E. “Doc” Smith
This is a book I read because it was a Book of the Month choice in a group on Goodreads that I was briefly part of. And because I’d read part of it years ago and thought that it being chosen as Book of the Month was a good excuse to finally finish it. I may have nominated it with that ulterior motive, in fact. I don’t recall.
The description, via multiple places online except Goodreads (the Goodreads description is for the revised version of the book, which is not the one I read):
It is a science fiction book. ‘Doc’ E. E. Smith pretty much invented the space opera genre, and Triplanetary is a good and well-known example. Physics, time, and politics never stand in the way of a plot that gallops ahead without letup. Having earned a PhD in chemical engineering, it’s understandable that the heroes of Smith’s story are all scientists. He didn’t want to be constrained by the limits of known science, however, so in his hands the electromagnetic spectrum becomes a raw material to be molded into ever-more amazing and lethal forms, and the speed of light is no bar to traveling through the interstellar void. Come enjoy this story of yesteryear, set in tomorrow, where real women ignite love at a glance, real men achieve in days what governments manage in decades, and aliens are an ever-present threat to Life-As-We-Know-It.
My review:
This review is of the shorter, original version, because I somehow grabbed that one instead of the other one from Project Gutenberg.
Whether or not Triplanetary is a good book depends on one’s expectations, I guess. I was expecting, due to it’s age, a pulpy adventure. That’s exactly what I got. If you are wanting something more cerebral or otherwise more suited to modern tastes, I suggest reading something else.
The characters are pretty much archetypes, but such wonderful examples of them that I found it hard to be annoyed. And Clio . . . I’ve read lots of much later sf where the female characters were more purely ornamental than her. She wasn’t quite an action hero on her own yet, but in her you see the elements that began the path to females who didn’t need a man to rescue them.
And I think I’ve got a crush on Costigan. He was so utterly heroic and devoted to Clio. I miss heroes who were just heroes. Why must they all be so tormented these days?
The plot was a little too coincidence driven, but, as I said, I was expecting pulp and that’s what I got. That said, it did stress my suspension of disbelief that everything was so quickly reverse engineered all the time. And a lot of violence could’ve been avoided had the Nevians or humans gone “Hey, can we talk?” much, much earlier, but that is acknowledged, at least.
Now, for my favorite thing about this book: The descriptions! Why, oh why, did descriptions like this go out of style?! “Above her, ruddy Mars and silvery Jupiter blazed in splendor ineffable against a background of utterly indescribable blackness–a background thickly besprinkled with dimensionless points of dazzling brilliance which were the stars.” The descriptions alone have sold me on Doc Smith’s writing style, and I’ll certainly be reading more by him just to get to experience more of it.
Personally, since I like my fiction on the pulpy side, I think this is one of the best books I’ve ever read. If you like your fiction a bit more serious, more carefully constructed and all that . . . you probably won’t like it, I’m sorry to say.
My review sums up my feelings rather nicely. I loved this book. Yes, the plot was kind of contrived, the characters were a little wooden . . . but I didn’t give a damn. The story was good, and story is something far deeper than plot and characters. It’s the subtle interplay of everything. (For more on this concept, see Patrick Rothfuss‘s blogpost here, about halfway down.)
And there’ll be another post today! And then I’m skipping the one that should’ve gone up this week (sorry I got so far behind), because it was supposed to be a short story that reads like a scene from something instead of a stand-alone, so, yeah, it’s not happening. So I’m back on schedule for next week! Yay! I know nobody else cares, but, still, yay!
Chapter Four is up!
Chapter Four of Intertwined Lives, wherein Quinn starts seriously thinking about what to do about his problem is now up: http://intertwined-lives.universal-nexus.com/2015/03/01/chapter-four-quinn/
Chapter Three is up!
The third chapter of my serial is available now. You can read it here: http://intertwined-lives.universal-nexus.com/2015/02/17/chapter-three-vincent/
Annoying Dilemma
I’ve got a problem with Jake’s Last Mission, and I don’t know what to do about it.
You see, between writing it and giving it it’s final editing pass for publication, I discovered I write much better in first person. I toyed with the idea of converting it to first person, but that would’ve meant delaying its release, which would’ve meant I couldn’t have taken advantage of the two free print copies I got from CreateSpace for winning NaNoWriMo. Yes, this was a dumbass reason, considering a copy of the book only costs me $2.15 plus shipping, but I didn’t realize that at the time.
Oh well, it’s out and has gotten reviews and such, so whatever, get on with the next book, right?
That was the philosophy I was taking. Alas, I’ve since gotten two ideas for prequels. Both of them work much better in first person. In third they both are way, way too tell-y. I can’t make the emotions show without telling them from Jake’s POV, not just looking over his shoulder, but looking out of his eyes.
When I faced this same dilemma with “Once A Hero, Always A Hero,” it was easy. My only reviewer was my mother. I could account for all but about three sales personally. So I rewrote it with a clear conscience because it’s not like anybody could be mislead by reviews, you know? But with this one, I did the review group thing, a person or two found it on their own and reviewed it, so regardless of how much I revise it, people are still going to be judging it based on reviews of an earlier version, and that just doesn’t seem like it’s going to give it a fair chance.
So I don’t know what to do:
Do I leave it as it is and go ahead and write the others in first person and just let people chalk it up to Early Installment Weirdness? (Warning: TVTropes link. I am not responsible for lost productivity caused by clicking it.)
Do I leave it as is and write the others in third despite them suffering for it?
Do I take it down and release a completely rewritten version, under a different ISBN and maybe title, with a note in the front that it’s a heavily reworked version?
Do I rewrite it and just put in my description, as I’ve seen other indie authors do, “Reviews before DATE refer to an older version of the book”, despite me being annoyed by that, because it’s not like that changes the fucking average or anything?
I just don’t know. Advice?